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Mea Culpa
Stephen Cooper
February 11, 2005

Three drinks past perfection,
Coral lanterns swayed in the sky.

*Flash*

Eight minutes and twenty seconds past connection,
Chartreuse lights signaled consent.

*Flash*

Five sirens past acceptance,
Amber flares escorted the surviving soul.

*Flash*

Nine years past remembrance,
Metal bars echo absolution.
Featured in Contemplicity's current release Confluence [link]

So please stop by and tell me what you think. Take care
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:iconxiooua:
I just realized a few days ago that I had never been to your gallery and I told myself that was silly, I'm glad I decided to stop by, this is a great piece! I loved your metaphors and the way you moved these scenes along. I felt like I was watching a movie. I especially loved the third stanza though, a great literary expression.

Take care! =)
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:iconcooper:
Wow thank you kindly for doing so! Much appreciated my friend! Not many dare to visit the Coopman's gallery these days.... :O maybe I should post some boobs... that would sooo help! lol... :O as long as they aren't man boobs... :O anyways take care and thanks again
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:iconxiooua:
Well it's helped some of the female writers around here. =P

I guess it's good that you don't have a crap gallery, you wouldn't have been able to draw me in with boobs!
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:iconlilithlairpoetry:
I love the word 'Chartreuse" it kinda rolls off my tongue when I say it...:) Love the action/pause sequences leading the stanza into the next.
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:iconcooper:
thank you kindly for your commentary! :O much appreciated, take care and glad you enjoyed it
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:iconchosenone-:
Whoa. I like the style you chose, it's very fitting for this work. You managed to express so much in the two lines between flashes, it's overwhelming. I like how the flashes become so brutal, it feels like we (the readers) are totally powerless to stop a series of events unfolding, the flash pounding the message into us further. The skipping time-frame is beautifully executed (no pun intended), I especially liked the last line.
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:iconcooper:
Thank you very kindly for your remarks, they have made my day :) take care and be well
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