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I Tried To Ask You…
Stephen A. Cooper
November 12, 2003
I tried to ask you…
If the heavens shattered
And broke all that mattered
Would our love be battered?
Or cement in time.
But I stopped and cried…
I tried to ask you…
If all that was good went bad
And consumed all we had
Would our love become sad?
Or ferment in space.
But I thought I had died…
I tried to ask you…
If the oceans drained bare
And swallowed up the air
Would our love be scared?
Or lament in waves.
But my tongue was tied…
I tried to ask you…
If you would be my bride
And take my hand in stride
Would you stay at my side?
Or repent inside.
But love shall abide!
Stephen A. Cooper
November 12, 2003
I tried to ask you…
If the heavens shattered
And broke all that mattered
Would our love be battered?
Or cement in time.
But I stopped and cried…
I tried to ask you…
If all that was good went bad
And consumed all we had
Would our love become sad?
Or ferment in space.
But I thought I had died…
I tried to ask you…
If the oceans drained bare
And swallowed up the air
Would our love be scared?
Or lament in waves.
But my tongue was tied…
I tried to ask you…
If you would be my bride
And take my hand in stride
Would you stay at my side?
Or repent inside.
But love shall abide!
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My first poem in a long time, take or leave it, I purely wrote it to get some emotions off my chest... but thank you for who do read it and give criticism. 
© 2003 - 2024 cooper
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Hey Coop,
Just going through your gallery and looking at some of your work.
I realise this is one of your older pieces, so I won't go into it too much.
Just thought it was worth mentioning that I really like some of the phrases you've used in this, like "cement in time". I really like that one.
I agree that the repeated rhyming is a bit too much for this poem, but hey, people have said that before, and like you say, it's one of your older works.
Just going through your gallery and looking at some of your work.
I realise this is one of your older pieces, so I won't go into it too much.
Just thought it was worth mentioning that I really like some of the phrases you've used in this, like "cement in time". I really like that one.
I agree that the repeated rhyming is a bit too much for this poem, but hey, people have said that before, and like you say, it's one of your older works.