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haunting as i imagine was the intention.
but just incredible.
I feel such melancholy reading this, but it's a beautiful feeling, and this speaks well for the success of your poem. I love the minimal structure, with well placed pauses supplying a feeling of timelessness, and such perfectly conceived key words as “meadow,” “silk,” “fragrance, and “ocean” opening the senses and stirring the emotions. I hope this young woman will one day find what or who she's waiting for, and I wish I could be that “who” and end her loneliness.
"Screens" might read better as "scans" but other than that I really like it. Is the second last line really needed?
Your writing has come along wonderfully, you should be very proud of your current standard. I'm enjoying it
and thank you... Plicity ownz me... I love it and it hopefully loves me. thank you my friend, take care (and I will get to your gallery soon I promise, my devwatch is bursting)