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- Alone - by `cooper:iconcooper:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




Alone

In a meadow
a silk laden girl
with the fragrance
of spring
once sat,

alone.

Now,
a young woman,
she screens the ocean
waiting for white sails
beyond the horizon.

waiting,

alone.
©2005-2009 `cooper
:iconcooper:

Author's Comments

Written during a writing exercise at Contemplicity [link] It is about two types of being alone, alone before love and alone afer love has come and gone. The preview image was taken on my travels in Ireland. Hope you enjoy, take care

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~chibiph3 Jun 22, 2005, 6:59:26 PM
i like how both when she is older and in her childhood, you can depict her as alone, as if some things never change.
simple but nice - i like it.

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your eulogy is like poetry
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~oedipa Jun 22, 2005, 9:11:54 PM
I think you've managed to convey the difference between the two types of being alone very subtly. For some reason this peom made me think of the Odyssey, with Penelope waiting for Odysseus to return home.

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She thought that his vocabulary was as bad as, like, whatever.
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~SakyraRebellion Jun 23, 2005, 4:34:00 AM
weeeeeeeeeee =D I liked iiiiit XD

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I miss you forever
i love you.
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`eolhc Jun 23, 2005, 1:45:49 PM
like oedipa i like the subtle way the two situations are conveyed
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`cooper Jun 23, 2005, 4:12:53 PM
yeah it is funny, sometimes the more things change, the more they stay the same eh? thanks for your comment! :O Take care
:iconcooper:
`cooper Jun 23, 2005, 4:15:07 PM
I had similar imagery floating in my head... thanks for the comment, take care
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`cooper Jun 23, 2005, 4:16:15 PM
thank you for the fav, i'm glad you enjoyed it. take care
:iconcooper:
`cooper Jun 23, 2005, 4:16:36 PM
thank you my friend. Was nice to hear from you, take care
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~chrissyd Jun 23, 2005, 5:28:35 PM
great piece steve ;)

i have to say, you would probably get a few more comments if you actually made some major flaws in your work :giggle:

You know i love your linework that i have tried myself on an occasion.....leaving a line or two and then adding in a word. it really draws your eye tothe word and buries it deep into yur eyes to give it more power than it would ordinarily have.

i also like how you dont follow what everyone else does and capitalize every line :nod:

:thumbsup::+fav:

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