congrats coop, its brillaint, the words are so beautiful ^_^

I love the gentle sound of a leaf's descent to the ground, only to look up at the skies and the sun all over again.

Beautifully penned, Steve.

comming from your lips, I thank you indeed! I hope you visit Plicity again! We would love the gracing of your presence. take care

Very beautifully and gracefully woven. And it's good that it ended on a bright note too, as I'm a sucker for good endings.

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Forgive your enemies. It messes with their heads.

Thanks my friend! take care

This is so beautiful. I cannot believe this has only received so little attention. I've found it following the link to contemplicity on *darkcrescendo 's Winter.

I've read your poem three times now. Every time I get goosebumps. A line like darkness is my bitter partner would normally make me groan, but it works so beautifully here, seeing how the absence of light was indeed the thing that condemned the leaf to death. I have this fixation on autumn. I might be biased.

I have one story (you see, I'm a straight prose monkey - I normally do only prose, but it's so much harder to find outstanding prose on dA than to find outstanding poetry, like this one) dealing intensively with autumn. It was my first story ever and it will soon be rewritten. When it will be, would you mind if I poked you about it and asked you to read it? If I ever do get that story published (and it is my intention to get my writing published), I would love to put this poem in front of it, of course with proper credits and all that. It fits so beautifully, it's almost as if it was written for my story.

I am feeling bad +faving poetry, because I'm supposed to be a prose monkey, and my favourites should be a good place to find good prose, but I just find nothing that touches me as intensively as this. Very well done.

Hah, as I've brought this poem up in an IRC channel, we discussed the symmetries. Damn, I missed those at first! Very very clever. The way you have your foot counts mirror each other in the two first and two last stanzas. How the themes mirror each other arround the axis of 'fandango':
Sun / new-found love
Sky callous and grey
Rain
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Fandango
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Rain
Sky callous and grey
Sun / new-found love

Am I missing something for the two innermost verses?

I really really dig this. Awesome work.

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SINAI BENDS

wow. First let me tell you how much your intense comment meant. It was so beautiful to come on here and see an actually comment that took time and though to create. I thank you for the attention you've brought to my writing, and I can know why the poem has received such little attention, because deviantART for poetry's sake is very hard to get noticed unless your very popular or have a $ in front of your name. As to reading your writing, sure send me your link when you're done. And as to putting it in your book... there is where I would be more inclined to say no.... you would have to give me a really good reason to incorporate it without compensation.

I hope you know that Contemplicity loves prose writers as much as poetry - you should take a closer look there and see if it is something you're after.

Once again, thank you very much for your criticism and wonderful thoughts and praise. Take care.

Mmmm..pretty tasty, and not something you see written about very often.

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This never happened. It will shock you how much it never happened.

thank you very kindly for your insight. It is much appreciated, and if I made one of your senses react, such as your taste, then I am happy take care and be well.